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                                                Real Me Men Mmmm Mighty So
                                                Sit I Sitting Agora Aqui Si Am Dren
                                                Ren Wren Bird-Bathed Hosing Wa
                                                Wondered Plundered Droppings Of
                                                Wild Verted Verticalled Verdan-Ted


                                                Khaki Green Cachaw Green Wet
                                                Dream Soak-A-Doke-Doked Oak
                                                Under Not In Up Into This I Look
                                                Only This Time Hose Drip Mad So
                                                Wanting To Drops Flesh Stimuled My

                                                Rather Raw Cooling Crisp Breezed
                                                Hotted Hearted After Mowing Step
                                                My Feet Klogs Touching Dark Matted
                                                Blues Faded Brighted Now Waters Cold
                                                Eeee-Lay-Lat-Late-Ate Straighted Bet
                               

                                                Passion So Dripping A Rip Strips M
                                                Mmmmmm Many Unto Fatigue Vert
                                                Green T-So Tony B My Shirt Yeah M
                                                Me To Given By Fam 2 Like Cats Real
                                                Man Be I To Louie Like Milo Like Them

                                                Waters Cold Soothe Me Damp Yeah Amp
                                                Re - Real-Like Vamped I'm Stam Stam
                                                Stamped Peter Framped His Wail My Sail
                                                Lusts Wanderings Ponder Onder Onderings
                                                Cre So Very Ative Active Imagins Mine I

                                                All Alive I Life Imbibe My Commune My Tr
                                                Trib Tribe A State My-Of Own Mine Very
                                                Mind So Stimuled So Satured So InFULL-Fla
                                                La La Trah Lah Lahhed Lamenting Going Go
                                                For Plainly Obliquely Stated Never Quite To

                                                Smile Cheer Grins Good Theirs On Towards Me
                                                Continuing On Happy Playful Song I'm Dancing
                                                Flirt-Alert Always Passing Always Testing So I
                                                Want Connections Responses Be Make Making
                                                With Mine Eyes My Words Never Quite Consume

                                                Never Quite Mating But So Much Playful Dating!

                                                As Say Many Yeah Real Men Do So Love Cats.

                                                Cha Cha Chasing
                                                Flirting
                                                First-Basing
                                                Flowers
                                                Eye Candies

                                                Most So
                                                Mostly Always
                                                Be I Happy
                                                Complem Them
                                                Menting

• Lori Desrosiers Anthony, I don't know what to say to give you advice or feedback on your work. The poems seem rather abstract, with an abundance of rhyming words, kind of Gertrude Stein-like, which is not a bad thing, it's just that most of us on this site write mainly more narrative-type poems. I appreciate your sharing these with us, but that may be partly why we're not giving you feedback. Thank you for sharing your work, and please forgive my silence in the critique department. I'm curious, what is your writing process? I see snippets of online posts and some fun and intelligent non-sequitors, plus some French words. The poems are certainly fun to read. Thanks!

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  Paula Friedman Good poem. Reminds me of the poetry we did in the early/mid-1960s, very influenced by the Beats. Good to see this sort of work coming back again!

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  Anthony Quinn Lori and Paula I will comment more later, watching the Tonys and I am Tony after all! Lori, in a sentence, I want to add something fresh and novel and hopefully somewhat original to what's out there already. I write fluidly and like I am dancing and singing and painting an not editing and just letting the energy that I jump onto and hang onto flow and be fresh and raw and what it is as it passes through and along me and I just want the experience to catch you all, too and it can mean whatever to you that you want, that's the beauty. You have to invest yourselves, too, otherwise I just hope you enjoy riding with me for a few moments, we have that anyway. Cheers, TONY

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• Lori Desrosiers Thanks, Tony. It's a good ride!

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  Anthony Quinn I wonder sometimes as loosely as I work, as extemporaneously, as tangentially, as fluidly and rapidly and excitedly - and leaving everything in my wake, thoughts unfinished, shoestrings untied, words not completed that I started with but that somehow got left behind as others attached themselves to my running trains of various thoughts going each which way, lucky to have my head screwed onto my head or otherwise I would probably lose that or leave that, too ... but what a thrill to be alive, to be on a journey, on a ride, an artistic somersault, ... and so very much more, will the world, will I ever understand, and yet I'm happy to put it all out there, honestly, proudly, individually Lori ... let the chips fall where they may ,,,,

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  Anthony Quinn I feel the earth move under my feet ... Carole King just sang that on the TONYS and I enjoyed that. That's sort of what it's all about for me, the earth moving and me with it. I don't know if what I am doing will be understood or appreciated by many. I would like my effort and my daring to be appreciated, but my artist work, well that will depend I am sure. I don't do it for money, I do it because I have to, because it just comes out and I stop and I record and I write and it's what I am and what I do, for better of for worse, I accept it and maybe will see more clearly someday why any of this, but likely not, in the meantime I'm happy to have the earth move under my feet Lori. TONY 6/8/2014

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• Anthony Quinn I feel the earth move under my feet ... Carole King just sang that on the TONYS and I enjoyed that. That's sort of what it's all about for me, the earth moving and me with it. I don't know if what I am doing will be understood or appreciated by many. I...See More

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  Lori Desrosiers I'm happy for you also. I think most of us write because it gives us joy, and because we are driven to do so. I also enjoy the revision process, but keep my early drafts, because that joy of the first word is worth preserving.

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  Anthony Quinn The first word for me is the one I value most of all, why do we all get so rapt up in revising and reworking our original thoughts and impulses? I value those most as they are the true, raw , original, gutteral, most honest and immediate responses that we have/ make : for better or for worse, I don't like to rehearse, I like the idea of many ' artist's proofs', let someone else clean it up if they feel that they must. It's for myself and not others that I write and express myself ultimately.

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